专四写作常见错误盘点

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2018专四写作常见错误盘点

　　专业四级考试就写作而言，许多同学仍存在不少问题。今天，我们以同学们的写作原句为例，列举一些常见的共性问题，希望帮助大家避免此类错误。

2018专四写作常见错误盘点

　　结构问题

　　开头段没有归纳两方观点

　　我们先来看本次考试的写作要求：

　　The popularization of computer and Internet service has created a group of people called "indoorsy men" or "indoorsy women". They prefer to spend most of their time at home rather than go outdoors and have a face-to-face contact with others. Should people choose to become indoorsy? The following are the supporters' and opponents' opinions. Read carefully the opinions from both sides and write your response in about 200 words, in which you should first summarize briefly the opinions from both sides and give your view on the issue.

　　这里明确要求，应该先概括正反双方的观点，再阐述个人看法。而不少同学并未做到，下例为某位同学的作文首段：

　　Should People Become Indoorsy?

　　Nowadays, with the rapid development of internet, it brings huge convenience to people's life. However, for this reason, some people gradually become indoorsy. As for me, I hold the view that people should not choose to become indoorsy.

　　显然，这个开头引入现象后直接抛出了个人观点，缺少支持者和反对者的观点概述，因此被扣分。

　　理由段论点不切题

　　要写好理由段，起承转合的连接词必不可少，这使得文章条理清晰，也能帮助阅卷老师找到主要论点，拿到这节的主要得分点。同学们连接词的使用问题不大，基本都有意识地使用了常见的连接词，如to begin with, first and foremost, moreover, in addition, last but not least等等。

　　然而，一些同学的主要问题在于，即使用了这些连接词，读者却很难看出论点所在。如，有位同学在论述not to stay indoorsy时有这么一句话：

　　Furthermore, you have enough time to shape yourself with little effort, such as using photoshops, reconsideration of your words. These changes are superficial and unreal. Those real ones take your energy and time and come from yourself.

　　看到这句话，我明白TA想表达网络交流的弊端，但这与主旨没有直接联系起来，显得偏离主题。如果能紧密围绕主题展开，说明if you are indoorsy and rely on online communication这一背景，会改善很多。

　　结尾段过于简略

　　有的同学结尾只写了一句话：

　　It is hence not difficult to see that being indoorsy men or women is not a good choice for us.

　　通常来说，结尾段是对前文内容的总结，除了重申自己的观点，可以把主要论点换个方式表达一下，或者进行呼吁，以留下深刻印象。

　　表达问题

　　观点过于绝对

　　在写作中，同学们为了做到convincing，时常会写出一些观点片面、有失偏颇的句子。看下面这句话：

　　Outdoorsy men can do everything indoorsy people can do.

　　很明显，这句话过于绝对，是站不住脚的。若是在everything前面加上almost就没问题了。

　　人称混乱

　　汉语重直觉思维，英语重形式规范。在汉语中，人称的变化使用通常并不影响我们的理解，而在英语中，人称的随意变化则会造成困惑。看以下两例：

　　Computer and internet service is nothing but a virtual platform to express their feelings, which makes us awkard and uneasy in reality.

　　We needn't suffer from the noises outside so as to enjoy the tranquil world that belongs to you.

　　以上是句式表达很不错的两个句子，美中不足在于人称混乱。从their到us，从we到you，变化过于随意和混乱。在一个完整的论述中，尽量要保持人称的统一。可以选用we, they, one等人称进行阐述，避免随意变换。

　　“让”的表达

　　我们曾经推送过关于“让”的英文表达，指出在很多情况下，“让”并不等于let或make. 在这次写作中，还是有不少表达不当的句子：

　　Being indoorsy can let people settle in a peaceful environment.

　　英语中let通常表示“允许”的意思，而这句里其实是表达“使得”，可以用enable sb. to do sth.的结构。

　　Some are against being indoorsy because it will let their health get worse.

　　上句表达的是产生某种后果，用cause, lead to等的近义词汇比较恰当，还可以简洁表达为it can weaken their health. 更多“让”的得体表达，可以回顾推文“让”等于let和make吗?

　　语法问题

　　一直以来，语法是很多同学作文的最大问题。经过一段时间的备考，同学们大都对专四作文的结构安排、行文要求了然于胸，但写出的句子却总是语法错误频出，无法取得高分。这恐怕跟语法基础、写作习惯等密切相关。以下是此次写作中频繁出现的一些病句，请大家改正：

　　As the proliferation of computer and internet service, ....

　　Some problems may occur. Such as, people's character will change.

　　Some agree for the reason that it is convenient and make one concentrate on work easily. While others think it is bad for our health and communication ability.

　　The indoorsy spend much time to get along with themselves.

　　Due to the computer and other electronic products become common, a sea of people spend much time at home.

　　Should people choose to become indoorsy has caused much controversy.

　　Based on what have been discussed above, ...

　　Being indoorsy is not only beneficial for people's life, but also facilitate their work.

　　以上这些病句，涉及到as/ with表达“随着”的用法区别、such as/ for example表达“例如”的用法区别、while连接句子的用法、spend (time) (in) doing sth.的用法、due to用法、whether引导主语从句、主谓一致的单复数、not only ... but also用法等语法问题，都是写作中出错较多的，希望大家务必掌握。

　　卷面问题

　　在模拟考试中，有的同学字迹工整，卷面整洁，反映出认真的学习态度;也有的字迹潦草，勾勾画画，随意涂抹，甚至难以辨认。其实，卷面是最容易得分的一项，比答对一两道题目更容易做到。只要认真书写，卷面干净整齐，无形中就增加了印象分。

　　我们曾经的一篇推文，专门强调了书写的重要性，见“边看边聊英文书写”，在此不再赘述。只想补充说明下，万一在写作中出现错误，大家最好不要涂抹!涂抹可能会使得分下调一档，可以在错词上画一条斜线或横线，在旁边写出正确形式继续写作。

　　专四写作分值为20分，占全卷比重较大。一篇优秀的专四作文，内容切题，条理清楚，文章结构严谨，语法正确，语言表达通顺恰当，句式用词富有变化，有"闪光点"，基本无语言错误。希望大家多多总结经验教训，克服以上诸多问题，取得高分!

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