GMAT优秀作文精选-OG12-106
【原题】OG12 106
The following appeared in a memo to the Saluda town council from the town's business manager.
“Research indicates that those who exercise regularly are hospitalized less than half as often as those who don't exercise. By providing a well-equipped gym for Saluda's municipal employees, we should be able to reduce the cost of our group health insurance coverage by approximately 50% and thereby achieve a balanced town budget.”
Discuss how well reasoned.
【参考思路】
1.Gratuitous Assumption——无根据假设： A 不导致B
a/ 建造了gym，人们也不一定会去exercise
b/ Saluda的人不一定是因为不运动而变得hospitalized。
c/ 即使hospitalized能降低50%，不一定insurance cost也能减少50%
d/ 建造体育馆不一定能平衡预算(建造体育馆的花费可能超过了节省下来的`health insurance cost)
2.Casual-relationship——有他因(hospitalized有可能有其他原因，如因为环境污染导致患病)
3. survey is doubtful——可疑调查(50%的数据取得来源可疑，调查可能不够公正客观)
【参考范文】
In this memo Saluda's business manager recommends that the town provide a gym for its employees as a means of balancing the town's budget. The manager reasons that since studies show that people who exercise regularly are hospitalized less than half as often than those who don't exercise, Saluda could save approximately 50% on the cost of its group health insurance coverage by providing its employees with a well-equipped gym. The savings on insurance would balance the town's budget. The manager's argument is unconvincing because it rests on several unsupported and dubious assumptions.
First, the manager assumes that Saluda's employees will exercise regularly if a well-equipped facility is provided for them. This assumption is questionable since the mere fact that a gym is made available for employee use is no guarantee that they will avail themselves of it at all, let alone on a regular basis.
Second, the manager assumes that Saluda's employees do not exercise regularly. Once again, the manager offers no support for this crucial assumption. Obviously, if all of Sauda's employees already engage in daily exercise, the hospitalization rate will be unaffected by equipping an exercise facility and no savings will be realized on the group health insurance.
Third, the manager assumes that there is a direct relation between the hospitalization rate for employees and the cost of their group health insurance such that a reduction in the hospitalization rate will result in a corresponding reduction in the cost of insurance. While this may turn out to be true, the manager has failed to offer any evidence for this claim.
Finally, the manager assumes that the cost of building a well-equipped exercise facility will not negate the savings realized on the group health insurance. Until evidence has been provided to show that this is not the case, the manager's plan is unacceptable.
In conclusion, the business manager's proposal to provide an exercise facility as a means of balancing Saluda's budget is not convincing. To strengthen the argument, evidence would have to be provided for each of the assumptions listed in the previous analysis.
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